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tiffanyd02 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is a great series, very original :) I can't wait to see more of it
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WildMagic1 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2011   Traditional Artist
Wow! I just read your comic and it's great! :D
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Arysthae-niru Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
My God! This is so awesome, it is almost better than the Avatar fanart you have! I really love the story, though, I do agree with FuzzyNecromancer, it does drag on a little, though if it were made into a film or something, it would be awesome! LOVE!
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atharvaveda27 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
I am really enjoying TRV so far, especially how your main character is a cheerleader. Cheerleaders in fiction tend to suffer from being shut into very specific boxes, but you've made a great sympathetic character who is badass despite the cheerleader stigma. I can't wait to see more.
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FuzzyNecromancer Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010
The premise is appealing, the heroine sympathetic, and there are some funny moments. That said, I think your series suffers from big pacing problems, and most of the magical plot elements are needless convoluted and drag down the story.
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Booter-Freak Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010
You're definitely right, pacing is my biggest problem, something Imma have to rework later. Thanks for reading!
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FuzzyNecromancer Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010
Are you looking for constructive criticism, or do you have a clear idea of where you want to take it?
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Booter-Freak Featured By Owner May 2, 2010
I kinda know what areas need fixing, but I will never say no to constructive criticism~~:heart:
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FuzzyNecromancer Featured By Owner May 2, 2010
I think that you could cut the magical cousin entirely without losing anything from the story. As it is, she introduces a great many digressionary elements that bog down the narrative, and she has absolutely no personality or purpose beyond that of an exposition-delivery system. You could easily have the same information delivered smoother and swifter by the vampire who turns her or a genre-savvy friend. The faster she has to confront the issue on her own, the quicker the plot will take off, then humor and character growth can ensue.

I realize, however, that you probably have bigger plans for the other magical elements, and may not want to take such drastic measures. As it is, I think the way she is turned seems needlessly convoluted.
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Booter-Freak Featured By Owner May 5, 2010
Thanks for the critique! You were right, i do have plans for all those characters, but I'll definitely try to smooth things out in Claire's turning and try not to make Sedah a talk-box next time around! Thanks!
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